So ive decided maybe itll be better to start a new topic everytime a new song appears to be getting written down.
I guess ill start off the song with the first few lines maybe, we will see how it turns out.
Ok here goes.

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

.....my songs always seem to be dealing with opposite sex or something rather...
anyways...i think someone could make something out of it.
cya.
TMR3

T0mboy_Rampag3 wrote:

So ive decided maybe itll be better to start a new topic everytime a new song appears to be getting written down.
I guess ill start off the song with the first few lines maybe, we will see how it turns out.
Ok here goes.

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

.....my songs always seem to be dealing with opposite sex or something rather...
anyways...i think someone could make something out of it.
cya.
TMR3

I like the words it gets you thinking... one of the best subjects is the opposite sex, lots of material there !, how about..

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

well it seems we're in two different worlds
and there's no place to turn
no bridges to burn...
are you happy now?

Strat wrote:

I like the words it gets you thinking... one of the best subjects is the opposite sex, lots of material there!, how about..

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

well it seems we're in two different worlds
and there's no place to turn
no bridges to burn...
are you happy now?

strat and T, the chordbook lyrical fanatics xD

awesome guys!!!

Strat wrote:

I like the words it gets you thinking... one of the best subjects is the opposite sex, lots of material there !, how about..

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

well it seems we're in two different worlds
and there's no place to turn
no bridges to burn...
are you happy now?

Ok cool....now to end this first verse and jump into the chorus..
lets seee..

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

well it seems we're in two different worlds
and there's no place to turn
no bridges to burn...
are you happy now?

Now you've done it, your on the floor,
you're crying solid, but no one saw.
Strangers walk by, but i come near.
I put my hand out, without any fear.
you stand up close, i never noticed such flaws,
You've got me smiling, you've got me talking...

(CHORUS)


TMR3

Hey TR3, excellent stuff... mulling over chorus ideas...

HAY GUYS I DON,T LIKE IT;;THERES TO MANY WORDS LOL ;;JUST KIDING GREAT JOB ;;

i like theidea of the sonng .. it just needs somethiing ... how aboutt ?

I turn to the corner, i see your face.
Your with some friends who look just fake.
I see your eyes, they don't seem well
are you happy now?

well it seems we're in two different worlds
and there's no place to turn
no bridges to burn...
are you happy now?

two diffrent peop-le , meant to be
some people in this worl-d , cant understand the meanning
of truue love
are you happy now?


hmm....

Hey T,
I dont want to mess around with your lyrics, but when ya get it all down.   Give me an idea of what style/tempo/genre of music you invision for it..
Ballad, Rock, Blues,........Ect...., And I will try to put music to it..

Jim

J,
i actually havent finished that song..
i was waiting for someone to write the chorus..
but it seemed that no one had a clue..
i was waiting for strat to take a shot,
but he seems to be busy..

TMR3

Hi folks...

Welcome to CB MusicgurL....

Hey T I wont mess with your verse lyrics, as they seem fine.
But here are some lines to play around with for a chorus and an ending refrain:

Chorus:

BUT LIFE IS FOR LIVING
IT CAN SOMETIMES BE UNFORGIVING
BUT IF YOU CAN MASTER THE 'HOW'
YOU WILL BE HAPPY NOW.

Ending refrain:

THERE ARE MANY CORNERS IN LIFE TO TURN
AND MANY UNKNOWNS TO FACE
LIFE TRIES TO TRIP YOU UP AT EVERY TURN
BUT YOU MUST KEEP HOLD OF YOUR PLACE.


The verses seem to be of a negitive sense to me, (I may be interprateing wrong), but it seemed that chours or refrain should sum things up in a positive light.

Anyway, feel free to tear into this.  Its was just spur of the moment off the top of my head lines...

Jim

Hey guys,
thanks for everything,
ill try and get a few ideas from all of you.
not really free to write up the song for now,
but when i do have time,
ill give it some thought and the song might be finished shortly.
thanks for all your help.
TMR3

From what I gather, just from the first verse, is that the person in the song is seeing this girl as a "barbie"...fake, no real thoughts or emotions.  I was assuming the rest of the song would be about the girls in the world who are fake/posing for everyone.  Just an idea

buttercup wrote:

From what I gather, just from the first verse, is that the person in the song is seeing this girl as a "barbie"...fake, no real thoughts or emotions.  I was assuming the rest of the song would be about the girls in the world who are fake/posing for everyone.  Just an idea

It was just a thought of emotion, i was pretty upsetish angry then, i cant finish it, thats what always happens, i start a song, but hardly ever finish it.
Change it around if you want.
Really doesnt matter to me...

TMR3

I LIKE WRITING SONGS, THE RYTHM AND MELODYS COME QUICKLY THE "HOOK"  THE "CHORUS" THE "BRIDGE" I FIND ALL EASY, ITS THE LYRICS I SUCK AT, THEY ALL END UP SOUNDING LIKE "KISS" LYRICS HAHA, I LOVE KISS BUT CMON.....THE LYRICS ARE ALL ABOUT GIRLS"A LITTLE HOKEY"